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早DD的小鸭天地

Joedy & IELTS

 
 
 

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范文欣赏---a statue / sculpture  

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Joedy今天看到一篇关于statue/sculpture的卡片,

很不错哦

摘下来与各位小鸭分享一下

describe a statue or a sculpture

you should say

       what it is

       when and where you saw it

       what it was like

and explain why you love it

 

JOEDY来点评一下哦

范文欣赏---a statue / sculpture - 早DD - 早DD的小鸭天地

 

When it comes to a statue, I want to talk about the wax figure of Princess Diana (戴安娜蜡像)which I saw in Madame Tussauds wax museum in Hong Kong last Christmas.

直接切题,简洁明了

All the wax figures exhibited in the museum were all lifelike and each of them was a piece of art. Among all the wax figures, the wax figure of Princess Diana impressed me most.

自然引入主题

I am telling you, the moment I saw "her", I was really excited.

联系亲身感受,增加生动性

"She" was standing there peacefully and gracefully, dressed in a gorgeous black-and-blue evening gown with "her" sweet smile on "her" face. That smile coule light up everything in the world. The background was an enlarged black and white photo of Diana wearing a beautiful crown turning her head back smiling beautifully.

语言简洁,而且不会故用大词

The whole setting made me go back to those days when Diana was still alive.

开始转题,由描述statue变成描述a famous person

During her lifetime ,Diana did an enormous amount of charity work (慈善工作)and helped raise a lot of money for lots of children's funds and hospitals.

She told the world that people with AIDS deserve no isolation or discrimination by touching a HIV patient in 1987 when so many still believed that AIDS could be infected through casual contact. Her action changed the opinion of countless peolpe. Although she died over ten years ago, she still lives in peole's heart.

具体举实例论证Diana对世人以及对自己所产生的影响

I truly believe that the wax figure of Princess Diana is the most beautiful statue that I have ever seen before. I love the statue not because of the statue itself, but because of the personality the statue symbolizes-- my true heroine--Princess Diana.

自然结尾,回应主题

 

这段陈述可以转成很多变种卡,例如:

a famous person  i want to meet

a person i admire the most

a piece of artwork (such as a apinting)

a museum

an educational trip

 

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